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[info]dialogue_500; [Gokusen] Drunken Confessions

This one was written for a [info]dialogue_500 challenge. I've always wanted to try writing ShinKumi (and ooh, I also have them claimed over at [info]1sentence, ack!) and when the "Drunken Confessions" prompt came up, I figured it was my chance. :p There's a version which has (almost) pure dialogue, which can be found here. This one has more words because it has more description. I don't think I do very well with pure dialogue. *sigh*

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Author: [info]aoimidori
Fandom: Gokusen (mangaverse, mostly)
Prompt: 02 – Drunken Confessions
Pairings/Characters: Sawada Shin x Yamaguchi Kumiko, Tetsu, Minoru
Rating: PG-13 (to be safe, because it involves drunkenness?)
Warnings: Drunken Shin = OOC Shin, Plus this is SO UNBETA'd (I didn't even check it myself. T_T)
Word Count: 533 (accdg to Open Office anyway, but I think it counted all the hiccups too)

One would think that Sawada Shin would manage to keep his cool all the time. But apparently, even Shin isn't immune to the powers of alcohol.


“Aaah.. ahh, enough,” he said, red in the face, “Stop touch (hic) ing me there.”


“Eeeeeeeh?! What is Sawada doing here?!” Yamaguchi Kumiko exclaimed, surprised to see her top student sprawled on the floor of her living room.


“Aheee.. stoooo (hic) oop it. Not theeeeeere (hic),” she was about to call Tetsu and Minoru and ask for help in transferring Shin to the guest room but his silly face caught her attention.


“Oi, Sawada,” she tapped his cheeks, “Oi, wake up! What are you doing in my house?!”


“Hehehe,” he giggled, “(hic) Stop touching me theeeeeeere.”


“What are you talking about?! No one's touching you anywhere!”


“Ehehehe (hic) hehe, I can't take this any (hic) more,” he moved his right hand towards his crotch, “Stoooop iiiiiit.”


“Sawada!” Yankumi, pink in the face, slapped his hands. “Stop! Who brought you here?! Why are you so drunk?!”


“Yankumi-chaaaaaa (hic) n, is that you? You're so purrrrtyyyy without (hic) the ugly pigtails,” he said, touching her hair.


“Sawada Shin! If you don't stop acting like this...!”


“Pretty pretty Yankumi-chaaaaaaa (hic) n.”


Patience thinning, Yankumi could feel a vein popping on her forehead, “Tetsu! Minoru! Kyo!”


“Ne, Yankumi,” his voice was suddenly low, like a whisper.


“Eh?!”


“(hic) Ba-ka,” his finger was on her cheek, “Ahahahahaha,” he suddenly burst out laughing.


She could feel her cheeks getting flushed.


“Stand up! Come one, Sawada, stand up! There. Lean on me, I'll take you to the guest room myself. Agh. Tetsu! Minoru! Kyo!”


She placed his arm around her shoulder, trying to support him.


“Ahhh, Yankumi, you're so (hic) soft,” Shin said, rubbing his cheek on her shoulder. “You smell so good too.”


“You shut up Sawada,” Yankumi hissed, pissed off and determined to get to the bottom of this.


He giggled again, “You're so pretty when you get worked up.”


“Shut up.”


“Oi Yankumi. Look at me.”


“...”


“I like you,” he whispered, and then planted a kiss right on her lips. She stood staring at him for a few seconds.


“Ahahahahahahahahahaha,” and then he broke into a huge laughter. Yankumi let go of his arm and let him sprawl on the floor laughing out loud.


“TETSU!! MINORU!! KYO!! COME HERE NOW!!!”


“Ojou!” Tetsu and Minoru finally appeared, looking frantic.


“WHAT TOOK YOU SO LONG?!”


“Ahhh, well,” Tetsu started, trying to cough up some explanation.


“WHY IS SAWADA HERE?! AND WHY IS HE THIS DRUNK?! WHO'S RESPONSIBLE FOR THIS?!”


“I-i-it's K-k-kyo,” Tetsu stuttered, “He came home with the boy, already drunk.”


“WHAT?! Don't tell me he took Sawada out to clubs?! My student is still underaged!”


“...”


“Ah, take him to the guest room!”


“Hai! Right away, ojou!”


“KYO!!!!! Where is Kyo?! Just he wait til I get my hands on him!” She stormed out the room, leaving Tetsu and Minoru to handle the very much drunk Shin.


“I dreamt (hic) of her,” he whispered with a silly grin as they took him to the guest room, “I dreamt that I finally (hic) told her.”

Author's Note: I suck. I wasn't so happy with the ending actually. But anyway, like I said, I've wanted to try out writing ShinKumi for a while now so when this dialogue challenge came up, I couldn't help myself. There was a chapter in the manga where Shin goes out with Kyo and they get drunk and got to clubs and stuff. And Shin does say the words “ahhhh stop touching me there” with a silly look, and this was supposed to center on the part where Yankumi finds him at her house. But my Gokusen scanlations are with a friend and I couldn't check if I had it right. So this is basically just based on that, but twisted to my own version. PLUS I imagined the Jdrama versions of them when I wrote it. Except Kyo exists. So, uh, just imagine Nakama Yukie and MatsuJun transported to Mangaverse!Gokusen. :p


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Err, and someone want to leave me a crack LJ testimonial? *pokes everyone* And on another note, woohoo, yayness, new Endou Yuya header!! ♥[info]aoimidori[info]aoimidori[info]aoimidori




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[info]sheepmachine
2006-02-02 09:16 am UTC (link)
*o*~

Ang ganda ng colors! D:

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[info]kikiam
2006-02-02 09:30 am UTC (link)
Aagree na lang ako sa kapatid ko. LOL.

GOod luck sa Animax 24. :D

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[info]chibi_boom
2006-02-02 11:53 am UTC (link)
LOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOL~

Adik~XD

♥♥♥ the middle pic.<3

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[info]aoimidori
2006-02-03 12:57 pm UTC (link)
favorite ko rin yung pic na yun. kaya nga nakagitna eh. XD

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[info]mklutz
2006-02-02 01:12 pm UTC (link)
XD Aoi, I love it~! Ahh, silly drunk!Shin! So cute. *_*

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[info]seoinage
2006-02-02 08:12 pm UTC (link)
This is very cute!!! ♥

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[info]fangirlspirit
2006-02-06 03:33 am UTC (link)
This probably seems random because you have no idea who I am! Anywho, I *just* finished watching the jdrama for Fokusen and fell in love with Shinkumi and went out to find otehr like me ^^ I found your ficlet on the shinkumi lj community... and I love it! It's so cute ^^ I actually read the dialogue one first, but my gosh... just realizing what they DID (as in the actions) made everything so much more amusing XD Kawaii ^-^

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[info]aoimidori
2006-02-06 05:08 am UTC (link)
realizing what they DID (as in the actions) made everything so much more amusing XD
And that's wy I wanted to post the entrie version somewhere, even though the challenge was just to write a dialogue. :p

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Drunken Confessions
(Anonymous)
2008-03-17 10:29 pm UTC (link)
You made me want to cry. There I was, laughing as I was reading along, thinking Shin wouldn't be like that drunk and then you had to go and end it like that!! *wipes tears away* I am so not kidding, real tears here. Man, I am such an emotional girl, but the ending was very, very well done. It wasn't amazingly smooth, and I don't like how Yankumi didn't react at all to what he was doing besides dropping him and yelling for Testu, Minoru and Kyou. But that ending, the set-up in general, was excellent. Now, I'm off to try and figure these odd sites out to find more of your stuff. ^..^

Ryn Ryn

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Re: Drunken Confessions
(Anonymous)
2008-03-17 10:38 pm UTC (link)
Having reread this, granted I will probably read it several more times, I must correct my earlier comments. Yankumi is very much so in character, making the reactions more accurate. Anything that comes to my mind would only mess it up. It is very well done.

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Re: Drunken Confessions
[info]aoimidori
2008-03-18 10:02 am UTC (link)
thanks for reading. and i'm glad that i wrote something worth rereading so much that it gives you something new every time. :)

also, here, to make things easier:
http://13papernotes.livejournal.com/6832.html

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